The Delivery is fine, but I have some questions that could be cleared up with a rework down the line.
First, why does the Primalist call out to Eterra like a Keeper when he’s supposed to be like Grail, a Heoborean. Shouldn’t he be calling to Heorot?
Also, wouldn’t he be angry at the Gods in general for failing his tribe and family?
I think he needs a rework to fit his alleged background. Just a tiny niggle that can be looked at down the line.